Hi Diana! ;-)cool night-fingered hairpulsing cicadastime's arrhythmiaI keep coming back to this poem.I wonder if you could edit it a different way, and remove "time's"?e.g.arrhythmiamy cool night-fingered hairpulsing cicadasarrhythmia: wikipedia linkall my best,AlanWith Words.
I wasn't really pleased with "time's" either, but was at a loss otherwise.I think I like your version minus "my".arrhythmiacool night-fingered hairpulsing cicadas
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Hi Diana! ;-)
cool night-fingered hair
pulsing cicadas
time's arrhythmia
I keep coming back to this poem.
I wonder if you could edit it a different way, and remove "time's"?
e.g.
arrhythmia
my cool night-fingered hair
pulsing cicadas
arrhythmia: wikipedia link
all my best,
Alan
With Words
.
I wasn't really pleased with "time's" either, but was at a loss otherwise.
I think I like your version minus "my".
arrhythmia
cool night-fingered hair
pulsing cicadas
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