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One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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cool night-fingered hair
pulsing cicadas
time's arrhythmia

2 comments:

Area 17 said...

Hi Diana! ;-)

cool night-fingered hair
pulsing cicadas
time's arrhythmia


I keep coming back to this poem.

I wonder if you could edit it a different way, and remove "time's"?

e.g.

arrhythmia
my cool night-fingered hair
pulsing cicadas


arrhythmia: wikipedia link

all my best,
Alan
With Words
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diana l. said...

I wasn't really pleased with "time's" either, but was at a loss otherwise.
I think I like your version minus "my".

arrhythmia
cool night-fingered hair
pulsing cicadas