David I really like the humour here. It makes me think of a very long restful summer! I wonder if the omission of 'I am' from L1 would polish this a little more.HumblyPaul
yes great onejohn
I agree with Paul, a good poem but it needs a kire (kireji).Alan
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David I really like the humour here. It makes me think of a very long restful summer! I wonder if the omission of 'I am' from L1 would polish this a little more.
Humbly
Paul
yes great one
john
I agree with Paul, a good poem but it needs a kire (kireji).
Alan
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