One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
____________________________

.
soldier’s name
the prime minister suffers
a little mortification


Times Online: November 9, 2009
Gordon Brown ‘mortified’ over misspelt letter of condolence:
http://www.timesonline.co.uk/tol/news/world/Afghanistan/article6909326.ece
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4 comments:

Alan Summers said...

"I love, love love your use of mortification. Absolutely brilliant. I do prefer your second version. It's so simple, yet not. Just what I like about haiku."

Deb Scott
Read Write Poem
Community and News Director

Leatherdykeuk said...

Very clever!

Alan Summers said...

Sad really. A horrible business with a dead soldier's mum being caught in the middle of British Prime Minister politics and the changed politics of the newspaper that first published this issue.

As Japanese senryu focuses on highlighting politics in contrast with Western senryu which is more social foibles, I felt senryu needed to be used for this unpleasant business.

I hope it doesn't come across as only clever.

Alan

Leatherdykeuk said...

It doesn't. The whole affair highlighted the stresses of the office. It is highly doubtful wheter the PM did anything but memorise a speech and sign his name.