One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
____________________________

police sirens
nightshade berries blood-red
on leafless stems




edited 3:30pm - Thanks Alan.

4 comments:

Alan Summers said...

nightshade berries
blood-red on leafless stems
police sirens


Maybe switch the lines around a bit?

police sirens
nightshade berries blood-red
on leafless stems


all my best,

Alan
Area 17
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Leatherdykeuk said...

Thank you Alan. Yes - the swich brings a tighter verse. Thank you.

Ashi said...

and very dramatic.. good

Leatherdykeuk said...

Thanks Ashi!