.I love "a scourge of starlings"! ;-)a scourge of starlingsdescends (upon the garden)cat takes shelterI do feel you at least need a definite article.a scourge of starlingsdescends upon the gardenthe cat takes shelteror let us know why or where the cat takes shelter in the garden, or somewhere else?a scourge of starlingsthe cat takes shelter(behind the teasels)a scourge of starlingsfrom the garden the soundof the catflapBesides I might need lessons in how to hide in a garden. ;-)Alan
Thank you Alan.I had considered the cat flap but you succeeded where I didn't!
love it racheljohn
I really like this revised version very much! ;-)Alan
Thank you John.Thanks for the help, Alan!
scourge is such a wonderful word -- I feel sorry for that cat!
Thanks Kelly.The cat's fine - asking for food at present
Isn't always time to eat in the life of a cat?I like the haiku a lot. (And, great use of feedback!)
it is indeed! Thanks Diana
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