One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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swift rainclouds
a rusty black cab
with one headlight

4 comments:

Alan Summers said...

Fantastic!

I don't know if you meant it as a metaphor (as well) but brilliant!

Very fresh, and I'll always think of one headlamp rusty cabs now.

Alan
1000 Verse Renga Project

Dennis Tomlinson said...

Thanks, Alan! I didn't mean it as a metaphor but I did personify the vehicle a bit: while the clouds race overhead, this old, derelict London taxi is no longer capable of doing the job it once did.

Kelly Marszycki said...

a sense of maybe its' last run? good one, Dennis!

Dennis Tomlinson said...

Unfortunatley it's in the graveyard already!