One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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October ladybird -
a few steps in the sun
... on my shoulder

***

coccinelle d'octobre -
quelques pas au soleil
... sur mon épaule

4 comments:

Alan Summers said...

Hi Damien,

I really like this one.

October ladybirds are Asian ladybirds aka ladybugs.

Glad you aren't killing them as some people are.

Not sure you need the ellipsis e.g.

Asian ladybird
a few steps in the sun
on my shoulder

Asian ladybird threat around October.

all my best,

Alan
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Anonymous said...

Hi Alan,

thank you for your comment : I didn't know about Asian ladybirds.

I have even read on Internet that they were sometimes called Halloween lady beetles ...

an other way to introduce the season

All my best
Damien

Alan Summers said...

Hi Damien,

"Halloween lady beetles "

That sounds great, maybe a night haiku could incorporate that name?

Alan

Möme said...

I love it, and agree with Alan about the ellipsis.