One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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outside
wind, rain and leaves
I wish
and the fairy granted
inside cozy fireplace

3 comments:

Möme said...

As always, I really like your ideas, Ashi! Sometimes I wonder, though, if you could edit a bit more - 'compress', so to speak. Here I think you have, and the result is fun.

Ashi said...

Thanks Möme, I'll keep that in mind :)

Alan Summers said...

I love the idea too!

Re editing, just some food for thought:

outside
wind, rain, and leaves;
I (make a) wish
and the fairy grants it
(this) cozy fireplace


all my very best

Alan
2010 With Words Haiku Competition: weblink
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