As always, I really like your ideas, Ashi! Sometimes I wonder, though, if you could edit a bit more - 'compress', so to speak. Here I think you have, and the result is fun.
Thanks Möme, I'll keep that in mind :)
I love the idea too! Re editing, just some food for thought:outsidewind, rain, and leaves;I (make a) wishand the fairy grants it(this) cozy fireplaceall my very bestAlan2010 With Words Haiku Competition: weblink.
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As always, I really like your ideas, Ashi! Sometimes I wonder, though, if you could edit a bit more - 'compress', so to speak. Here I think you have, and the result is fun.
Thanks Möme, I'll keep that in mind :)
I love the idea too!
Re editing, just some food for thought:
outside
wind, rain, and leaves;
I (make a) wish
and the fairy grants it
(this) cozy fireplace
all my very best
Alan
2010 With Words Haiku Competition: weblink
.
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