One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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autumn twilight
even the gutters sing with
gusting tongues of fire

2 comments:

Alan Summers said...

Wow, really like this!

I wonder if you need all the words e.g.

autumn twilight
even the gutters
sing with fire


all my best,

Alan
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diana l. said...

I agree with both parts of Alan's comment. What if you just dropped "gusting"? A unique vivid moment.