One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way


this night
wrapped up in sleep
and fog pressing at my window


diana l. said...

I like the double layer. Do you think you need the "and"? "fog presses..." might be an alternative...

Kelly M. said...

I feel the weight!

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David said...

thanks Kelly it was 'haunting'

cheers diana my line is too long, i'll play with 'fog presses' a while.