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One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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Blackbird
in low flight breaking
the morning chillness

1 comment:

diana l. said...

Hi, Ashi. I think that this is a translation issue. For both this and the previous haiku, you can drop the "ness" on your final words. I think that that will strengthen them both.