Hi Rachel,cemetery wallVictoria plums overhangunexpected snackAt the moment it's a kind of inversion, which you don't need because if you follow a linear progression you get the surprise effect e.g.unexpected snackVictoria plums overhangthe cemetery wallall my best,AlanAlan's Haiku Blog of Events
Oh! Excellent revision, Alan. Thank you.
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Hi Rachel,
cemetery wall
Victoria plums overhang
unexpected snack
At the moment it's a kind of inversion, which you don't need because if you follow a linear progression you get the surprise effect
e.g.
unexpected snack
Victoria plums overhang
the cemetery wall
all my best,
Alan
Alan's Haiku Blog of Events
Oh! Excellent revision, Alan. Thank you.
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