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One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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cobwebs
in the greenhouse
grapes are still sour

6 comments:

John McDonald said...

good one Rachel
john

Rachel Green said...

Thank you John

Area 17 said...

I like the reverse order of lines two and three because it could also be read to include all the other meanings of "sour grapes".

weblink: wiki's sour grapes

Alan

diana l. said...

Really nice, Rachel.

Rachel Green said...

Thank you Alan -- I actually intended that!

Diana - Thank you.

Area 17 said...

Hi Rachel! ;-)

I thought you did, but I was delightfully surprised at how many meanings come out from sour grapes, not just the obvious one. ;-)

Well done again.

Alan