great picture racheljohn
Thank you John :)
I really like this Rachel.I wonder if L2 read 'my wind tangled hair' whether it would tighten it just a bit and add a touch of Akiko. Either way a lovely poem.
Paul, thank you. That does tighten it beautifully.
picking blackberriesmy wind-tangled my hairamongst the brambles I think you need to remove that second 'my' in line two.picking blackberriesmy wind-tangled hairamongst the brambles or picking blackberriesthey wind-tangle my hairamongst the brambles Alan
Oh! I concur!The second 'my' was a typo left behind after an edit.
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