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One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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under the weather
wishing Indian summer
would warm up my bones
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1 comment:

Area 17 said...

I really like this!

under the weather
wishing Indian summer
would warm up my bones

I just feel that the gerund 'ing' needs to go, and a further tweaking could be...?

under the weather
I wish this Indian summer
would warm my bones

Alan
Area 17
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September 25, 2009

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