One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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.
lifting me away
from the computer
to my kitchen window
the early morning honks
of migrating canada geese
.

7 comments:

nora said...

Britons have Canada geese? Who knew?

Lovely 'ku too!

Alan Summers said...

We got Canada geese galore. They were off to Slimbridge, home to birds from all over the world!

Slimbridge, created by the lovely Sir Peter Scott.

Slimbridge weblink: Slimbridge

Alan

Crafty Green Poet said...

lovely...

Paul Smith said...

A tanka Mr Summers! It works really well Alan, a lovely gentle movement unfolding.

I wonder if dropping one of the 'my's from L2/3 and simply having 'the' might just tighten it a bit...

lifting me away
from the computer
to my kitchen window
the early morning honks
of migrating canada geese

(Just a thought!)

I love 'early morning honks'

Best wishes
Paul

Kelly Marszycki said...

Those Canadian geese do have a way of making one rise from one's seat -- I like the "lifting" part of this! Wonderful, Alan --

Alan Summers said...

Thanks for all the comments, and thanks Paul for the edit advice! ;-)

I've changed it now, and appreciate the proofread very much.

I've written a few tanka or tanka like poems now, and must remember to submit them. Too haiku and renga focused at the moment. ;-)

Alan
1000 Verse Renga
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Jenn Jilks said...

There is nothing more comforting to me than fall and the geese. Like going home.