dismembered magpie left on the cemetery path horse chestnuts underfoot
I think you can leave out 'underfoot' partly as it sounds a little archaic for a haiku.
dismembered magpie left on the cemetery path horse chestnuts
Here's one from me, an actual experience, and the writing of it inspired by Michael McClintock's famous haiku:
high noon half a bandicoot the flies’ hum
Alan Summers The British Haiku Society Postal Workshops Anthology 2000
dead cat... open mouthed to the pouring rain
Michael McClintock The Haiku Anthology (p121)
E-mail Interview With McClintock by Adria Neapolitan
AN: Can you elaborate on the bluntness and the honesty in your haiku? (I’m thinking about the "dead cat... / open mouthed / to the pouring rain.")
MM: I want to see things as they are, not always as I would wish them to be.
That is easy to say, but often hard to do. I want to work in both ends of the spectrum, to write about what I find, too, between the extremes of beauty and ugliness.
I think that is where most of us live our lives; there’s no sense in pretending otherwise.
And I don’t have to go looking for it; it comes to me, whether I want it to or not.
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dismembered magpie
left on the cemetery path
horse chestnuts underfoot
I think you can leave out 'underfoot' partly as it sounds a little archaic for a haiku.
dismembered magpie
left on the cemetery path
horse chestnuts
Here's one from me, an actual experience, and the writing of it inspired by Michael McClintock's famous haiku:
high noon
half a bandicoot
the flies’ hum
Alan Summers
The British Haiku Society Postal Workshops Anthology 2000
dead cat...
open mouthed
to the pouring rain
Michael McClintock
The Haiku Anthology (p121)
E-mail Interview With McClintock by Adria Neapolitan
AN: Can you elaborate on the bluntness and the honesty in your haiku? (I’m thinking about the "dead cat... / open mouthed / to the pouring rain.")
MM: I want to see things as they are, not always as I would wish them to be.
That is easy to say, but often hard to do. I want to work in both ends of the spectrum, to write about what I find, too, between the extremes of beauty and ugliness.
I think that is where most of us live our lives; there’s no sense in pretending otherwise.
And I don’t have to go looking for it; it comes to me, whether I want it to or not.
all my best,
Alan
With Words
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Fascinating, Alan, thank you.
I can identify with Mr. McClintock - the tagline for my photo blog has always been 'ugly is beauty from another perspective'
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