One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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equinox:
wind beats a drum
sunflowers lie drunkenly

3 comments:

Kelly Marszycki said...

This is very rich -- sound, imagery, tone -- excellent!

diana l. said...

Wonderful.

(What about the idea of switching the second and third lines for structural/rhythm purposes?)

diana l. said...
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