Love roadside pumpkins!Add ferris wheels and it is really a good creepy halloween type haiku. ;-)ferris wheel creaksin the grey morning lightroadside pumpkins I wondered if you could switch the lines around?roadside pumpkinsin the grey morning lighta ferris wheel creaksora ferris wheel creaksin the grey morning lightroadside pumpkins .
ooh, lovely edit, Alan - thanks!
What I also like about this haiku is that 'grey' works so well here because the pumpkins will be orange, and the ferris wheel conjures up bright colours of the fairground.AlanRenga verse email: email@example.comBBC weblink: BBC 1000 verse renga article Alan's blog weblink: 1000 Verse Renga blog.
Thank you :)
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