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One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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first really cool night
remembering what box
the blankets are in
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1 comment:

Area 17 said...

I love this, although I don't think you need "really" in the first line.

first really cool night
remembering what box
the blankets are in

first cool night
remembering what box
the blankets are in

If you bring in yourself, it also adds a slightly extra layer of interpretation. ;-)

first cool night
I remember what box
the blankets are in

Alan
With Words
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October 02, 2009

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