One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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tea steams the window
backdraft leaves whirl
in the gutter



edited - thank you, Alan

7 comments:

Area 17 said...

leaves gutter whirl
in backdraft vortices
tea steams the window


Love this, but wonder if you would consider swapping the lines round?

tea steams the window
backdraft leaves whirl
in the gutter


Alan
1000 Verse Renga
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Rachel Green said...

Alan, you never cease to amaze me with your skill. Thank you.

diana l. said...

I love the steamed window!

Rachel Green said...

Thanks you :)

Area 17 said...

You're very good at humouring me, just as well I'm passionate about your haiku! ;-)

Thanks Rachel!

Alan

John McDonald said...

enjoyed this
john

Rachel Green said...

Thank you John