.Killer first line! ;-)sparrow songthe rustle of falling leavesBoythorpe woodI'd make the last two lines into a phrasal part e.g.sparrow songthe rustle of falling leavesin Boythorpe woodAlanAlan's Haiku Blog of Events.
Thank you, Alan - I'd debathed the 'in' for a while ;)
Aha!I think it's okay to have it back in, otherwise it looks like three separate statements.You are certainly on a roll lately! ;-)Alan
Thank you :)
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Killer first line! ;-)
sparrow song
the rustle of falling leaves
Boythorpe wood
I'd make the last two lines into a phrasal part e.g.
sparrow song
the rustle of falling leaves
in Boythorpe wood
Alan
Alan's Haiku Blog of Events
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Thank you, Alan -
I'd debathed the 'in' for a while ;)
Aha!
I think it's okay to have it back in, otherwise it looks like three separate statements.
You are certainly on a roll lately! ;-)
Alan
Thank you :)
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