the hiss of tyresin morning darknesrain lashes downSome alternatives (and losing the typo):lashing rainthe hiss of car tyres in morning darknessmorning darknessthe hiss of car tyres in the rainmorning darknessthe hiss of HGV tyres in the rainThis reminds me of a poem I wrote about the sound of tyres at night while it was raining. It can be an amazing and comforting sound, as long, of course, as no car or lorry crashes into your building. ;-)Alan1000 Verse Renga Project.
Thank you Alan. Your help appreciated as always. I liked your second version best, I think.
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