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One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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stair-rods of rain
the windowsill fanned
by an irritated cat





edited with Alan's help - thank you

4 comments:

Area 17 said...

I love stair-rods of rain, it's the best line and deserves to be the first line!


on the windowsill
the cat flicks her tail, annoyed
stair-rods of rain


Maybe play with the haiku a bit more?

e.g.

stair-rods of rain
the windowsill fanned
by an irritated cat


all my best,

Alan
Area17
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Rachel Green said...

oh, excellent!

Thanks for the help, Alan.

Carlos Gesmundo said...

"stair-rods of rain..." -- I imagine prison-cell bars. Great image!

Rachel Green said...

Carlos, that's exactly what they looked like!