One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
____________________________

windchimes
over the graves of children
cold breezes


edited - thanks David

4 comments:

David said...

Rachel I like this a lot.

but you don't need 'tinkle'

'chimes' is right word and it is already there.

David

Leatherdykeuk said...

You're right of course!

diana l. said...

Ouch. Well done, and good editing.

Leatherdykeuk said...

thank you Diana