One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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City got wet,
Under cover of umbrellas
Persons will hide

3 comments:

Beatrice V said...

What an interesting image Gennady, and I would love to hear it in the Russian version! Meanwhile, in my opinion to get a better understanding in English, I feel it could flow better somehow like this:

moving undercover
of shifting umbrellas
--a whole city

Gen said...

Dear Beatrice,I should agree. Can such variant is more clear

town under rain
moving umbrellas
faces are hidden

Russian verse

Город промокший,
Под разноцветьем зонтов
Спрятались лица

Vida said...

Love the edition! And the Russian version with the colored umbrellas - great contrast!