I like the idea, but feel the removal of articles makes it difficult to read.though the car windownearly full moon hangs lowin afternoon sky e.g.car windowa nearly full moon lowin the afternoon sky orcar passengera nearly full moon lowin the afternoon sky open car windowa nearly full moon lowin the afternoon sky motor cruisinga nearly full moon lowin the afternoon sky .
..very nice..quiteinteresting when onereads: 'through the carwindow'..did you mean tosay 'through' and made a typo..>>spiros---------------------
Spiros, it was supposed to be "through". I was driving home and noticed the moon was already out and it the sky was just beginning to turn towards dusk. It was very cool. Thanks for the input Alan.
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I like the idea, but feel the removal of articles makes it difficult to read.
though the car window
nearly full moon hangs low
in afternoon sky
e.g.
car window
a nearly full moon low
in the afternoon sky
or
car passenger
a nearly full moon low
in the afternoon sky
open car window
a nearly full moon low
in the afternoon sky
motor cruising
a nearly full moon low
in the afternoon sky
.
..very nice..quite
interesting when one
reads: 'through the car
window'..did you mean to
say 'through' and made a typo
..>>spiros
---------------------
Spiros, it was supposed to be "through". I was driving home and noticed the moon was already out and it the sky was just beginning to turn towards dusk. It was very cool.
Thanks for the input Alan.
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