One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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though the car window
nearly full moon hangs low
in afternoon sky

3 comments:

Alan Summers said...

I like the idea, but feel the removal of articles makes it difficult to read.


though the car window
nearly full moon hangs low
in afternoon sky


e.g.

car window
a nearly full moon low
in the afternoon sky


or

car passenger
a nearly full moon low
in the afternoon sky


open car window
a nearly full moon low
in the afternoon sky


motor cruising
a nearly full moon low
in the afternoon sky


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Spiros Zafiris said...

..very nice..quite
interesting when one
reads: 'through the car
window'..did you mean to
say 'through' and made a typo

..>>spiros
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Reihaisha said...

Spiros, it was supposed to be "through". I was driving home and noticed the moon was already out and it the sky was just beginning to turn towards dusk. It was very cool.

Thanks for the input Alan.