One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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on the corner
yellow lamplight pools
against the darkness --

3 comments:

David said...

i like the first two lines. Something like

on the corner
yellow lamplight pools
into the gutter


David

Kelly Marszycki said...

David -- I suppose I was aiming to conjure up a sense of trepidation, impending dread?

David said...

how about

on the corner
yellow lamplight pools
against the darkness

that leaves the reader with sense of dread without telling them

best wishes

David