Wow! Less is certainly more. I think this is an amazing improvement. Much more powerful.My mind keeps switching the last two lines. What do you think? (and do you mean "summer's"?)
Yes you are right. I will rewrite it yet once again.love-Melanie Bishop
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Wow! Less is certainly more. I think this is an amazing improvement. Much more powerful.
My mind keeps switching the last two lines. What do you think? (and do you mean "summer's"?)
Yes you are right. I will rewrite it yet once again.
love-Melanie Bishop
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