Hi David,With a terrific opening line I don't think you all of that in the second line.All night the the wind and rainclawed at the scored slopes of the mountainAll night the the wind and rainthe scored slopes of the mountainAlanArea17.
That's good AlancheersD
my humble rewrite:all night wind rainscored mountain slopesleaving out the three 'the's...
Very strong (and great photo!) Good feedback, too.
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