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One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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All night the the wind and rain
clawed at the scored slopes of the mountain

Photo Climbing Snowdon by Kris Thirty6Red

4 comments:

Area 17 said...

Hi David,

With a terrific opening line I don't think you all of that in the second line.

All night the the wind and rain
clawed at the scored slopes of the mountain


All night the the wind and rain
the scored slopes of the mountain


Alan
Area17
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David said...

That's good Alan

cheers

D

old pajamas said...

my humble rewrite:

all night wind rain
scored mountain slopes

leaving out the three 'the's...

diana l. said...

Very strong (and great photo!) Good feedback, too.