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sunlit treetops
over the football pitch
a rainbow smile

Area 17 said...: sunlight gilds treetops
over the football pitch
a rainbow smile

I really like this but wonder if you need "gilds"?

sunlit treetops
over the football pitch
that rainbow smile

Alan

p.s. thanks for the neat renga verse by the way! ;-)

.; November 03, 2009
Rachel Green said...: You're right again, Alan, thanks.

My please re the renga verse - I hope you can fit it somewhere. I always thought renga verses were in response to the previous one.; November 03, 2009
Area 17 said...: Hi Rachel,

re renga verses, they are normally linked to previous verse, and in most cases we have managed to do that.

But we are having such a flood of renga verses each day (24 hours a day) via two cellphone txt numbers; Myspace; Twitter; Facebook; five email addresses; and visitors to Bath Central Library plus all the other county libraries, plus schools in Sydney Australia and Leicestershire in England with different time zones, that it's not always possible to do this renga in the normal traditional manner even though I'm in contact via phone and web 14 hours a day.

I need a holiday! ;-)

Alan; November 04, 2009

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