Autumn

lost my inspiration
in a pile of leaves
should I dig
or must I wait
for spring to uncover it

Spiros Zafiris said...: ..this one is much more
lovely today, than when i
read it yesterday..i'm
almost afraid to approach
it tomorrow..>>spiros; November 03, 2010
Spiros Zafiris said...: ..sorry, me again (it
was I who deleted last
comment, cause it wasn't
just right..anyways,
in Line 5, you don't need
an article; more correct
without:
or wait
for spring to uncover it
---------
myself, i prefer:

or must I wait
for spring to uncover it

..>>spiros
-------------; November 03, 2010
Vida said...: Hi Spiros,

Do not read it tomorrow, you may not like it at all :))

I am applying the changes that you proposed! There was something missing in the 4th line. I was thinking of repeating ‘should’ but ‘must’ is better. Thank you!
And, I really appreciate your help with the correctness - my English is far from perfect :); November 03, 2010
Spiros Zafiris said...: ..Vida..>it reads quite
marvelously now; 'tis a
wonderful poem..it's only
right to remove an article
from where one doesn't
belong..you're welcomed; November 03, 2010
Beatrice V said...: The result is lovely!; November 04, 2010

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