One edge
hanging over the mountain--
the Milky Way

---Shiki
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crows become restless
gathering in murder
--in a moment they are gone

overhead the cacophony of sound
together they fly in formation
--only the swift and strong shall return

4 comments:

Alan Summers said...

Dear mysterious person ;-)

crows become restless
gathering in murder
--in a moment they are gone

overhead the cacophony of sound
together they fly in formation
--only the swift and strong shall return


I was wondering if this could be put into a tanka"ish" five line form maybe?

e.g.

restless crows
gathering in murder
and cacophony of sound

together they fly in formation
only the quick and strong return


all my best,
Alan
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Alan Summers said...

Thanks Jenn! ;-)

Love the photo, crows are always photogenic and entertaining. ;-)

all my best,
Alan
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martin said...

i think that would make a nice tanka...
I always enjoy your images.


the sounds of mallards fall to the next pond

Jenn Jilks said...

Great help to have feedback. Tanku! :-)